I have returned your composition scripts today and do have a look at the comments and ways to improve your compositions. As mentioned,
- Tenses are a huge error in your composition. Many of you are using present tenses which is wrong. When we write a story, it is recapping and talking about what happened, thus you should use the past tense.
- Elaboration is important. I want to know about the feelings and how and why the person did what he did.
- Example: Tom is wearing his favourite red sneakers. The sneakers mean alot to him as it is the first birthday gift he has received from his parents and it is his lucky charm. (Here, you are elaborating on his action and how and why he wears that pair of red sneakers)
- Do not just talk about the actions. Elaborate and explain more.
- Many of you talked about yourself being separated and then reuniting but you left out about your parents who were also being separated from you. What happened to them? Explain more.
As homework, look through your composition and rewrite in green pen the whole composition again so that while writing, you are also reading through and correcting your mistakes. Don't rewrite the same mistakes again. Look at my corrections for you.
If you have not done well, don't be upset. Don't give up. Remember that there are a few more compositions coming up and I will be taking the best 2 or 3 compositions. Those who have done well, do not be complacent. Remember to put in more effort and find ways to improve further.
Homework:
Composition Corrections
Grammar Worksheet 2.1 on Idioms
Sincerely,
Mr Nelson Ong
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